Ok, I like some of the changes.. Not perfect yet..
6/10 simply because i like your playing style and lyrics have meaning.
I still don't like that small chordal run though, it just destroys the feel that you have established.
I'll PM you with ideas, respond ASAP
Charlie Knight AKA OCELOT3000
You wanted a review, here it is!!
I can't say anything truely evil about it I suppose, not the way I would've gone about it but nice none the less. I've listened to the lyrics and i can understand what you mean, i'm sure that their are plenty of people that know what you mean when you say things like "jump on the chances when you get them" Deep.. ok, to the point but it works.
I like ideas in this, such as the eagles methods which you may bee unaware of like tapping on a guitar body, (i can only assume that is what you're doing) and it woks well but a few ideas that you might want to consider:
1. First and formost, SINGING, if you're trying to convince someone on something then you have to scream it to the heavens not whimper it like you're pondering you're own existance, If your Forte is towards singing, then hire someone to do it for you. It's hard to find one that you like but it's always worth it in the end.
2. That little run of chords towards the end after "live them".... no, i don't like it.. ok the way that you finished with "live for today" was good but those strings of chords just don't work, If you wanted to create a different feel there then might I suggest adding a harmonised vocal line or another guitar line, possibly with a slight bit of overdrive on?? that could work.
3. Also, on a personal not there are parts where you're not singing and the guitar is starting to get boring so put something in there, a "ghost track" with a few guitar fills work work well there.
P.S. Long shot, but if you want a hand or want to know how i'd do it then take ideas from it then send me a message to my account and e-mail me the chords, lyrics and anything else and i'll directly e-mail you back the finished copy.
U CALL THAT EFFORT, Importing a MIDI file into FL, changing the generators then classing it as a re-mix.....
Freddie Mercury Would Roll over in his grave if he could hear this.
No Excuse For that.....
In one word, INCREDIBLE!!!!
I love this piece, so full of emotion, power and style. It is clearly obvious from this piece that their were emotions running through you while you wrote this.
You asked me Mate so let me ask you, What software do you use to compose these pieces???
Fruity Studio's 6, however the sounds you are hearing have little to do with Fruity Studio's. You're hearing plug in programs (VST's), which supply me with these high quality samples. I'm not sure if the program you use supports VST's, but if they do smack me a pm and i'll show you everything I know.
Thank you for the review, i'm glad you enjoyed the piece ^^.
^.^ Fantasic work m8 keep it up.
This is a very relaxing piece of work and i hope that you produce more like it.
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